The Crashing Waves
By: Melissa White
As I walk along the shore, the crashing waves frighten me
The thundering into the land seems somehow is different, though I have heard the sounds so many times before
The wind whips wildly through my long hair
Just as it blows the mane of the wild mare, horses who run free
Do I dare to keep walking along the blowing sand
This wondrous sight, not for us to understand ,but to enjoy
Watching the waves is a magnificent site
Waves continue to crash along the beach
As the mighty tiger bumps his head on the cage; letting out his mighty roar
The crashing waves corrections:.
The Crashing Waves
By: Melissa White
As I walk along the shore
crashing waves frighten me
yet I still want more. <avoid end rhymes (shore/more)<save end rhymes for song lyrics<contemporary poetry seldom uses end rhymes unless your writing formal, structured poems<SOLUTION, AN EASY ONE: playing around w/ line breaks will bury your stanzas' end rhymes, so to speak, and turn them into internal rhymes which are great and acceptable<
The winds are whipping through my hair
Should I keep walking
do I dare?
Watching this magnificent sight
To some this scene could instill fright.
I come on days such as this for the experience;
the wind and the water oddly excite me <end on the declarative, here<seems more powerful
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